August 31, 2009
I recently received a submission response  from an established Sci-Fi/ Fantasy publisher. It was a reach, but I was hoping more for constructive feedback than I was expecting publication.
A paraphrased excerpt from said response:
The term: Hasidic shit farming Wop was used quite early in the story; this took me out of it. In total you used the word fuck, or some derivative, 51 times in 32 pages: when you factor this with the numerous other profane words and terms, some of which appear to have been created whole cloth for the story, it stretches the boundaries of realistic speech.
I enjoyed much of the story but the profanity was so excessive and the tone so base it continually jarred me from the narrative. You need to consider your readers (and potential publishers) sensibilities when shaping the verbiage of your characters dialogue.
My initial response was mild dejection mixed with personal affront. The speech of the main characters was patterned after my own, so them reading as implausibly profane is somewhat of a knock on my own gentility. More concerning was the question of audience: is there a niche for R-rated magical realism? Is the vulgarity and absurd violence a crutch in lieu of careful plotting? Did that strand of Panda seamen really serve the story?
It bears considering.
 Other might call it a rejection letter.